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    FWA 17th Anniversary Show: Meltdown vs Fallout | Card/Discussion Thread



    FANTASY WRESTLING ALLIANCE: ‘MELTDOWN’

    and…



    FALLOUT, INCORPORATED

    proudly present…


    THE FWA SEVENTEENTH ANNIVERSARY SHOW


    Sunday, August 28th 2022

    LIVE from AT&T Stadium in Arlington, Texas

    THE MAIN EVENT
    [1/60]
    Fallout World Heavyweight Champion
    Danny Toner
    vs.
    FWA World Heavyweight Champion
    Devin Golden
    vs.
    World X Champion
    Alyster Black
    Triple Threat Match
    Match Writer: SS

    The headline match going on the Seventeenth Anniversary show will see three men who have proclaimed themselves as the ‘real World Champion’ going one-on-one-one in a Triple Threat Match. Interestingly, all three have positioned themselves on different sides of the ongoing conflict between the FWA and Fallout, Incorporated.

    Danny Toner, who earned his right to call himself a World Champion at Back in Business is Fallout’s choice, backed by the powerful Executive Excellence stable. Devin Golden appointed himself as the FWA’s champion, angered at Toner stealing the championship that he had physical possession of until shortly before Back in Business. Then there is Alyster Black, the man who can call himself the ‘World’ X Champion; the most dominant champion in the FWA in the last twelve months, who was released by Fallout at Back in Business but opted to continue defending his title that he is yet to rightfully lose.

    The history between these three as individuals interacting with each other is rich, extensive and complex. But most interestingly, all three are members of the tag teams that have dominated the FWA landscape in the last several years, being Golden Rock, TxR and the Gang Stars. All three were phenomenal FWA Tag Team Champions but all have graduated to a larger stage and in Texas we will find out who truly is the greatest World Champion in the world today.

    BRAND WARFARE
    [1/-]
    Team Fallout
    [Fallout Televsion Champion Shawn Summers (Captain), Phillip A. Jackson, Jeremy Best, Jackson Fenix and XYZ]
    vs.
    Team Meltdown
    [Cyrus Truth (Captain), Sawyer Xavier, Bullet Broc, Saint Sulley and Lizzie Rose]
    Jailhouse Blues Match
    (One fall to a finish, decision cannot be reached until all competitors have entered the match)
    Match Writer: Man

    Following the leaking of a shipping manifest relating to this match on the Anniversary Show, it can now be revealed that the Jailhouse Blues Match will be making its return on August 28th. Two rings side by side will be covered by a steel cage for the ten combatants to fight in. Two men will enter at the beginning, and every two minutes an individual from one team will also enter the fray. The match will end in either pinfall or submission once all ten individuals have entered the match.

    Cyrus Truth is the man tasked with defending the FWA’s honour and leading Meltdown’s team. Truth has been extremely vocal in his anger towards Fallout’s secession and the ‘theft’ of FWA’s championships. On his team are the dangerous Hardcore Wrestling Alliance, who should be right at home in a match such as this. Lizzie Rose is announced to be part of the team, looking to bounce back from her unsuccessful attempt at becoming North American Champion. Rounding out the team is Sawyer Xavier, a man that has been singled out by Cyrus as not being a team player and has allowed his captain to be beaten down on more than one occasion when he could have prevented it.

    Opposite Cyrus Truth is Shawn Summers, a man that Cyrus knows extremely well. The Fallout Television Champion has made it clear that he is not happy with his assigned team of Jeremy Best, Jackson Fenix, XYZ and Phillip A. Jackson. For Summers, this match is about bragging rights over an old rival as opposed to any sort of brand loyalty. PAJ - a legend of the FWA - finds himself facing the company where he became a household name. Best and XYZ have been more concerned with recovering Krash’s body more than anything else and have spoken out against the secession. Jackson Fenix though has been an important cog for Fallout, although his carelessness did allow a Meltdown invasion to take place at The Granary.

    With two captains not on the same page as their teams, both sides need to work things out and they will need to do so before August 28th.

    TAG TEAM CULMINATION
    [1/60]
    Fallout World Tag Team Champions
    Bad Reputation
    [Gabrielle and Kayden Knox]
    vs.
    The Crimson Ghouls
    [Aka Yurei and Reagan Cole]
    Tag Team Match
    Match Writer: Jimmy

    One of the earliest moves in the conflict between the two companies was the ‘Raid of Roughs Towers’, where Meltdown infiltrated the oil platform and ransacked the show, targeting several Fallout competitors. Two of the key targets of that assault were the team that would later go on to become the Fallout World Tag Team Champions later that night.

    Kayden Knox and Gabrielle did not have any belts to celebrate their victory with, as the physical possession of the belts had been claimed by Meltdown’s Reagan Cole and Aka Yurei during the raid. They did not hold the titles for long though, as Bad Reputation returned the favour on the following Meltdown and took the titles back.

    The Crimson Ghouls have been in good form since joining back together, picking up a couple of good wins. The same can be said for Bad Reputation, with the influence of Executive Excellence behind them. What is going to happen when two teams at the top of their game come face to face?

    WHO IS THE FOURTH MAN?
    [1/60]
    FWA North American Champion
    Johnny Johnson
    vs.
    Executive Excellence Member #4
    Singles Match
    Match Writer: Man

    When the then-North American Champion Chris Crowe was attacked in a hit-and-run in the parking lot of the Estadio Azteca prior to the commencement of the Meltdown First Anniversary show (and the first show since the secession of Fallout from the FWA), many questions were asked about who could have been responsible for such an attack.

    Many fingers were pointed, and one of those accused of carrying out the deed was the man that would become the new North American Champion following the vacation of the belt, Johnny ‘The Legend’ Johnson. Whilst Johnson stood a lot to gain from Crowe being taken out, he was not the responsible party. Instead, it was the doing of Fallout’s Executive Excellence and more specifically, the fourth member of the group, whose identity remains hidden.

    This revelation came following Johnson’s victory over Lizzie Rose to capture the belt, but ‘The Legend’ will be in for a tough time against this mystery individual, who will have to reveal themselves in Texas. The championship is not on the line, but if Executive Excellence’s warning to the new champion is to be believed, their goal will be to take Johnson out the same way that they did to Crowe and claim the title for themselves.

    Can Johnson overcome the challenge of facing an unknown quantity, even with his father back at his side? But chiefly, who is the fourth man?

    NEPHEWS CIVIL WAR
    [-/-]
    Nephews Fallout Branch
    [Uncle J.J. JAY! (Captain), NGator Guy, Megalodon Man, NOE-1 and Maid of Death]
    Vs.
    Nephews Meltdown Branch
    [Harry the Sane Wizard (Captain), Thomas West, NOT_Quiet, Gerald Grayson and Michelle von Horrowitz]
    Cosmic Playground 2: Electric Boogaloo The Nephews Strike Back Chamber of Secrets Twin Towers Match
    Match Writer: SS/Jon

    A consequence of the secession of Fallout was that the Cthulhu’s Nephews group found themselves split between both companies, with Thomas West, Gerald Grayson, Michelle von Horrowitz and Harry the Sane Wizard all having committed themselves to Meltdown prior to Back in Business. This left the leader of the group, Uncle J.J. JAY! and Quiet as the only primary Nephews left as part of Fallout, Incorporated. However, Quiet was fired by Cal Robinson for attacking Fallout officials. Shortly after, an equally mysterious individual known as ‘NOT_Quiet’ appeared as a new signing to Meltdown and the FWA.

    In response to this, Uncle promoted a number of Nephews who would once be considered secondary to the core group up to be his new ace team, bringing The Leviathans, NOE-1 and the Maid of Death into the forefront. Maid of Death was presented with the Crown of Thorns that had been won by Thomas West in the King of DeathMatch tournament earlier this year. Suspiciously, the Meltdown Nephews had just discovered that the crown had gone missing.

    Referring to the Meltdown branch as the ‘Pseudo-Nephews’, Uncle then resumed hostilities with his former acolytes by challenging them to only the second-ever Cosmic Playground match, a match which Uncle led the Nephews to victory in last year. Thomas West, in retaliation of having his crown stolen and the Meltdown Nephews’ Yoct destroyed, accepted the challenge and named Harry the Sane Wizard as the Meltdown Nephews captain.

    MADMAN’S MAYHEM RETURNS
    [1/-]
    Konchu Hao
    vs.
    Jason Randall
    Madman’s Mayhem Match
    Match Writer: Jimmy

    What started as part of the company warfare between the seceded Fallout, Incorporated and what remained of the FWA turned into a very personal affair very quickly. The early interactions between the companies, including the ‘Raid of Roughs Towers’ and Fallout’s subsequent response, put both Konchu Hao and Jason Randall squarely in each other’s spotlights.

    Both had taken turns ambushing the other as part of the several invasions that took place, and it was revealed on Fallout’s second show since the secession that the two would be facing off on the Seventeenth Anniversary Show. Jason Randall then took the opportunity to up the ante, by challenging Hao to a Madman’s Mayhem Match; a match of Konchu’s own design that he has not yet tasted defeat in.

    Whilst the match itself is currently in an unknown format (as it is decided on the whims of the participants involved), many commentators have noted that this feud that has arisen between Randall and Hao is born out of the shared bloodlust that each hold as opposed to loyalty to their respective brands.

    PROMO DEADLINES.
    L.A. - Monday 22nd August at 23.59(PM)
    New York - Tuesday 23rd August at 03:00(AM)
    Bicester Village - Tuesday 23rd August at 08:00(AM)
    Istanbul - Tuesday 23rd August at 10:00(AM).
    Melbourne - Tuesday 23rd August at 17:00(PM).

    Extensions are available upon request, so long as:
    - it is at least 24 hours before deadline.
    - nobody in your match has submitted their promo.

    Extensions granted:
    Jon (Nephews Fallout Branch)
    SS & Jam (Nephews Meltdown Branch)
    OldJay (Johnny Johnson)
    Josh Drake (EE #4)
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    Re: FWA 17th Anniversary Show: Meltdown vs Fallout | Card/Discussion Thread

    Good luck all!

    Early predictions...
    Black v Toner v Golden
    I can see this one going any one of the three ways quite easily but I'm going to back Alyster Black. If he shows up in the same manner as he did at last year's 16th Anny Show, during his tag run or at BiB then I reckon he could take this for his first world title. But it's close to call. Comparing the very best work of all three across the year is tough so if all show out this could be an incredibly difficult one to judge. Think Black will have had time to plan given his time off screen so that's what edges it for me

    Brand Warfare: Fallout v Meltdown.
    We saw in CIBERNETICO that there's a lot of variables when predicting multiman matches. I think this is close in paper, maybe the edge to Fallout, but Cyrus has been putting out some good stuff the last few shows (particularly vs me naturally) so I'm going to predict that Truth pulls his team up by the bootstraps and Meltdown get a win.

    Crimson Ghouls vs. EE.
    I unfortunately haven't had chance to read Aka/Raygun since their return so this one I'm going mostly off their attempt at Golden Rock back on 012, where both (but particularly Grim) were unlucky not to get those titles. Bad Rep have showed some great chemistry since joining up, though, and put out some great work to capture the belts in the first place against some GOAT tag champs in MOOT. I'm gonna predict Bad Rep but might change that when I get chance to read some more Ghouls.

    NA Title Match.
    Out of the loop and not sure who the FOURTH MAN is. I have my own guess. But I'll play it safe and go JJ here.

    Konchu vs. Randall.
    This has been a fun little offshoot minifeud and good matching up of two guys prone to chaos. Randall has been doing some interesting things in his promos but I think Konchu might prove too strong for the Wildcard here.

    Cthulhu's Nephews Civil War Electric Boogaloo Return to Sicily Next Friday Deadhouse Gates
    Gotta back the GOAT. Meltdown Branch takes it.

    Predicting a 3-2 overall win for Meltdown.


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    Re: FWA 17th Anniversary Show: Meltdown vs Fallout | Card/Discussion Thread

    Extension plz

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    Re: FWA 17th Anniversary Show: Meltdown vs Fallout | Card/Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by GeneralSecretary View Post
    Extension plz
    Denied. Mods should hold themselves to a higher standard sorry.


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    Re: FWA 17th Anniversary Show: Meltdown vs Fallout | Card/Discussion Thread

    I shall want an extension please?

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    Re: FWA 17th Anniversary Show: Meltdown vs Fallout | Card/Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by GeneralSecretary View Post
    Extension plz
    You can for reals.

    Quote Originally Posted by OldJay View Post
    I shall want an extension please?
    Sure.

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    Re: FWA 17th Anniversary Show: Meltdown vs Fallout | Card/Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by Spider-Man View Post
    You can for reals.



    Sure.
    With the reveal that I will be facing Josh Drake can I please have a week extension?

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    Re: FWA 17th Anniversary Show: Meltdown vs Fallout | Card/Discussion Thread

    Requesting an extension.

    Spoiler:






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    Re: FWA 17th Anniversary Show: Meltdown vs Fallout | Card/Discussion Thread

    Extension for me too oh wise mods.

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    Re: FWA 17th Anniversary Show: Meltdown vs Fallout | Card/Discussion Thread

    You got it.

    TGO (for Golden), Tig, Gip, Grim, and OMB have one too.


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    Re: FWA 17th Anniversary Show: Meltdown vs Fallout | Card/Discussion Thread

    Can I request an extension, please?

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    Re: FWA 17th Anniversary Show: Meltdown vs Fallout | Card/Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by Comeback Kid View Post
    Can I request an extension, please?
    Wow letting your team down already smh.
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    Quote Originally Posted by The Gipper View Post
    Wow letting your team down already smh.

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    Re: FWA 17th Anniversary Show: Meltdown vs Fallout | Card/Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by Comeback Kid View Post
    Can I request an extension, please?
    Granted, that means the rest of Team Fallout and Team Meltdown get extensions as well.
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    Re: FWA 17th Anniversary Show: Meltdown vs Fallout | Card/Discussion Thread

    @everyone we are issuing an additional one day extension for the anniversary show, beyond the current extension.

    the deadline is now in 35.5 hrs (23:59 pacific time on weds 24 aug).

    anyone who has already posted can make one edit between now and the new deadline, if they wish to.

    peace.


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    Kayden Knox and Gabrielle vs. Aka Yurei and Reagan Cole.

    There was an interesting discussion in the discord on deadline day to do with longer promos and whether they always win. I can certainly think of some quick examples to the contrary - TxR vs. Golden Rock at BiB, MvH in the bounty hunt, Thomas West vs. Toner at this BiB, a couple [REDACTED] promos - it's certainly true that more words allow you to delve deeper into your theme or tell a more complicated story so long as you use the words wisely. This Aka and Reagan promo reminded me of a Chris Crowe promo (I can't remember what for) that was really good but also very long and felt at times like a few different promo ideas spliced into one. I thought that was a little true here at times, with the varying sections of the promo feeling somewhat standalone. It obviously ties together within the narrative and there are certainly thematic links between the different sections but I think this promo could maybe have used stripping back a little. I could maybe have done with one or two less iterations of Cole fighting his demons, for instance.

    Cole repeating the task of fighting this monster until he gets it right, Aka confronting a distorted version of herself speaking uncomfortable home truths, the whole haunted house concept which brings out what's inside… each of these things in themselves is maybe a trope but I think the development within each of them (particularly the separate scenes with Aka and Cole) justify their use and the writing of these sections was definitely interesting. I like that we have more chance to see Aka and Cole interact, too. That was one of my major issues with the ill-fated Fallout 012 title challenge and I concur with those that commend the chemistry between the two characters.

    Contrast this to Fallout's champions and I found that promo to have a similar but different issue to the separate-but-together sections in Meltdown's team. I found the casino set-up intriguing at start and thought this was going to score high for creativity, but I think that context and backdrop sort of fell away and disappeared during much of the middle and end of the promo, before returning to some degree at the end. The middle section of the promo is both a strength and a weakness: the discussion from Kayden and Gaby regarding Knox's accomplishments and what he's done for her were really great, heartfelt, and touching little interactions, but the kayfabe-realism of them did seem a little jarring given what went before with the set-up.

    I liked the character development in this promo for Kayden and Gabrielle, particularly pertaining to their chemistry as a team and what each of them mean to one another. Danny being always on the peripheries is fine for now but I would like to see more interaction between these two and him in future promos, maybe in trios matches. We've focussed a lot on these promos on what Gabrielle can do and is doing for Kayden, but I liked that this promo brought out when Kayden has done for Gabrielle. The section when she talks about her first title in seven years is surprising and sort of readdresses the previously assumed balance in the partnership. Kayden is in perma-sadboi mode right now and I think this compliments what ETE has been doing with Gabrielle quite nicely.

    Although there was good character development for Bad Reputation in this promo I think the winner of that category is probably Reagan. I've mentioned that maybe this section became a tad repetitive (deliberately so, I get it) at the end and is itself not necessarily an original setup, the execution was really good and I thought it was a more ambitious sequence than we are used to seeing from Cole. That in itself is praiseworthy and the quality of writing in that section and throughout the Ghouls promo was very high.






    Team Meltdown vs. Team Fallout.

    I was worried that the curse of the multi-man tag match might return here, but I was really pleased to see there was ten promos posted and some really good ones amongst the number.

    Firstly have to mention Cyrus' promo which I thought was fantastic and probably the best in the match (it was my highest grades promo outside of the main event). Truth has been on a real tear recently and he's in fine form ahead of Golden Opportunity. I thought this was a really sort of quietly creative promo, in the same way I found the Konchu MHM roleplay to be, particularly in the sequences where Cyrus goes around to assemble his team. These sections - although maybe a little belied by the other promos from Meltdown people, particularly the HWA - were superbly written and quietly reinforced how much this match means to Cyrus as well as setting up multiple dynamics between Truth and his team. These were the highlight for me, but the monologue was also top tier Cyrus, particularly the sections breaking down the history between Truth and Summers and giving us Cyrus' analysis of Der Basterd's career.

    I also felt the Cyrus promo was the most 'in-tune' with what is going on around the fed, with references to all of his fellow combatant's current travails as well as outside the scope of this match. This was good.

    Across from Truth we have Shawn Summers, taking on the captaincy on the Fallout side. There was a similar thing to with the Bad Reputation promo where the context was dropped half way through, but it was done here in a more obviously deliberate way and I'm looking forward to returning to the world you set up in the first part of the promo. Although the shift was obviously deliberate into a more grounded reality I did find it a little jarring and this felt maybe a little like two halves of two different promos spliced together. That being said, both of these 'halves' were very well done: a more creative and abstract slant in the first half and then something more direct and down to earth in the second. I always love when Shawn Summers shows his insecurities and his vulnerabilities, and that was ample and very well executed in this promo.

    Insecurities were also on display in the Sawyer Xavier promo, and I thought this was the best stretch of that particular Meltdown roleplay. The parts where he thinks about not having anyone in the backstage area, despite being in the eye of the hurricane of this big battle, were quite heartfelt and very well done. This is also the sort of musing that the internal monologue style you chose is best suited for. I would've liked to have seen this expanded more. I think a lot of this promo shows the start of something good but with a few too many underdeveloped ideas. I do like the threads about the dynamic between Xavier and Truth, as well as setting down of something possibly in the future with Summers in your callback to the events from Roughs Towers.

    I expected to see quite a lot of insecurities in the Lizzie Rose promo following on from her unsuccessful attempt at the North American Championship, but I liked that you flipped that on its head and showed a spark and a fire in Rose in the face of this adversity. This was good character development for me and not something I would've immediately expected from Rose. I had to dissociate myself from the subject matter for Rose's resurgence of mind, because it is bad song with bad lyric, but the idea of it was good and the monologue from Lizzie was very believable. She was fired up about the situation and I liked that her motivation in the match is unique – something that could be said about a great number of its combatants, particularly (maybe) on the Meltdown side.

    My favourite of the Fallout promos was probably the Jeremy Best one, and maybe because it was unlike anything else in the match really. This was a unique and creative set-up and a really nice way of setting up the dynamics between Best and his teammates very well. I think you focussed on teammates more than opponents, which is maybe logical given than these are the characters that Jeremy has had interaction with leading up to this moment, thanks to the brand split. I loved the Mr. Summers character and thought he was actually quite similar to Scorpane in your usual promos in the way you write him. Was amusing when they turned out to be in cahoots towards the end of the story. I like that you went all in on the prison break set up and didn't feel the need to really explain too much as to why the characters are being pitched in this setting - it just sort of worked and I imagined Jeremy curled up in bed with his night cap on dreaming these events or something. The prison set-up could maybe have suffered because Toner did a prison set-up very recently, but this diverged very quickly into something else entirely and was a nice play on the Jailhouse Blues, cage match stipulation for this five on five. This was really fun and, like Cyrus for Meltdown, Best is building up some pre-Golden Opportunity momentum on the Fallout side.

    The Jackson promo was a pretty interesting monologue with some nice metaphorical descriptive passages to break things up, though these could maybe have been expanded upon. My favourite part about this promo was relating the Fallout vs. Meltdown brand saga to Jackson's own story, particularly with the different treatment he experienced with Watkins and Russnow. I like that he now sees Rupert's hospitality as hollow, but maybe still preferential to the non-existent greeting from Russnow and Meltdown. Discussing the brand warfare match through the lens of 'loyalty' was interesting and again another unique motivation going into this match. My favourite thing about this angle is people taking it in different directions and that's particularly true with the varying motivating factors of characters going into this Jailhouse Blues match.

    Speaking of loyalty… the HWA promo was probably the most shocking of the night and was a completely unique promo, something I've not seen before in that it was essentially the first show for this new rival(?) company. I think this was both a blessing and a curse for this promo. A curse because there were some sections in the night which felt like they had little to do with the five-on-five and were there to flesh out the world-building element of the new federation, which is understandable but I think definitely detracted. They were thankfully short, and quickly gave way to Broc and Sulley's developing conversational monologue, the chemistry between the characters being a key strength of the promo. I thought some of the arguments being levied against FWA by Sulley and Broc were sort of weak (particularly with relations to the HOF – would the FWA be announcing such an event amidst seismic upheaval in the company?), others were acute and delivered in a cutting manner. This was a really interesting promo and I think overall it overcame the limitations of the format.

    The Jackson Fenix promo and the XYZ promo I think suffered with the handlers having other commitments on the card. I enjoyed the Fenix one and like the comic relief that the character provides, and the motivational sections were well done even if well-trodden material for this character and others. It's nice to see Al back in the XYZ promo but I think it's fair to say energy was being saved in this one for expenditure in the main event.

    Will be curious to see how this one shakes out in grades. Some interesting stuff on display from both sides here.





    Alyster Black vs. Danny Toner vs. Devin Golden

    Will start by saying I graded these three promos the highest on the card, all over thirty five and with less than 0.5 between first and third. Quality here was insanely high. But there can be ONLY ONE.

    I enjoyed the themes at play in the Toner promo, with the argument being made that the universe is guiding these three men to this place and that they'd find themselves standing at this precipice even if the more chance elements of the story (like pairings in the Elite Tag Team Classic, which is one of the start points of this epic years-long feud) were altered. This was well-achieved through the three different narratives - Gang Stars Time, Golden Rock Time, TxR Time (though why Danny didn't request Christian Cage's theme music at end of this strand idk) - and the closing scenes were written with a lot of pathos and seemed to tie up these themes very nicely. It was a much more grounded promo than the one that won you the title, but I think the match focus here was maybe even a little stronger, with none of the elements - either the direct ones or those in alternate timelines - feeling particularly forced in relation to the match here.

    The universe guiding to a certain point and alternate timelines is used in a very different way in the Devin Golden promo, and in many ways - the most obvious being the very end - this felt like almost an epilogue, maybe not to the Golden character overall but this solipsistic phase of his latter career. This promo seemed to want to serve as a thematic ending to the recent existential heart of your writing, but I'm not sure it has been resolved in a fully satisfactory way as of yet (if it will ever be). Match focus here was good, also, with the importance of the triple threat always prevalent through the twinned narratives. The structuring of this was particularly fun, returning to that dual realities we saw in your title winning promo. I'm still pondering the relationship between these themes and the Golden character, or whether it is more a statement on the collective reality made by participators in the fed. This promo seemed to suggest the latter is true. This was quite an impactful section in the promo and one that I thought was most powerful in bringing around some 'closure' in this story.

    Alyster Black uses 'the universe' in a very different and much more literal way in his promo. The structure here is much more linear than in the other two promos, but in a unique way which I'll get to later I guess. I think the match focus in the Black promo was maybe a little weaker than in the other two, in that lengthy sections of the promo are dedicated to Aly and his relationship with master and mentor Steve Storme. I think there is still enough focus on the triple threat in other parts of the promo, though, and there is scope here for development not precisely related to the match, even though some effort is made to relate the private epiphanies made by Black after his confrontations with Storme and the dynamic with Toner and Golden. I enjoyed the narrative overall, even if it was maybe more simple than the other two in terms of its structuring, and the section with Krash the force God was particularly well written and full of pathos.

    All things considered, I had Tig just ahead in the quality of content section.

    I thought the Golden promo was the cleanest in terms of spelling and grammar by a couple millimeters, but had a couple coding errors. Toner's was more ambitious in terms of how the promo looked on the screen but had more mistakes (only a few more). Black's was probably the cleanest looking overall and had a nice, simple, elegant layout. I had TGO a smidge ahead on presentation.

    I thought all three promos were very creative and scored highly in this category. The multiple narrative strands at work in both the Toner and the Golden promos were well done, served an interesting thematic purpose (and, although the device itself was similar across the two promos, the outcome and purpose seemed very different in each of them), and added value in this category. The different realities on display in the Toner promo did seem reminiscent of some other promos in this vain, particularly Man's alternate Peacock timeline stuff, but I felt there was enough difference - particularly with Toner being placed into the roles of Black and Ramon here, which I liked but have questions about, which I'll get to later - to justify it. Golden's dual timeline stuff is, as I've already said, referential of earlier work of the character, which I think maybe is detrimental slightly in this category (although the work overcomes it) it helps the promo exponentially in character ones. I like promos set in the future, though I had hoped racism would be sorted by 2058 or whenever this was.

    Cyrus took a stab at a Star Wars promo I believe but I think this one from rawr was interesting and unique, and felt like an original story in the world as opposed to a rehashing of the Phantom Menace (my favourite one) or whatever. Maybe I'm wrong there. I think the overall devaluing of Star Wars' legacy with diminishing returns of the output of the franchise doesn't help you, but I try to put that out of mind when grading. I really enjoyed the world-building element of this promo and thought it was very creative how you used this to draw out character development, match focus, and a look at backstory despite being in this fantastical context. I also enjoyed the breaking of the fourth wall where the metaphor is dropped for a few paragraphs. All three scored high on creativity but I had rawr just ahead in that category.

    Character development and portrayal in these promos were generally very good. Black had a lot of character development even with the fantastical setting which was impressive, though I guess pitching the dour and sour-faced (under the mask) shoegazer as a Jedi Knight is always going to be a little bit of a stretch with character portrayal. Toner was spot on during his own sections, the ones that were centre aligned, and the development in this promo as well as his arc overall comes through there. I enjoyed the alternate timelines and thought their thematic intent was a positive in the quality of content category, but part of me wonders why you made the choice of having Toner embody versions of Golden and Black (mannerisms and disposition, I guess) as opposed to pitching the Danny Toner we know into this role. I think this could have been done whilst still accomplishing the same narrative themes.

    Devin Golden's character progression in this promo was excellent, I thought, and was both reflective and analytical of his career, seemed to hint at wrapping up this particular stage in some ways, whilst also suggesting there's still a little more to come. It's impressive that you've managed to write a promo that is very reflective whilst also succesful in moving the character on. Death is obviously the ultimate and final character development, and any promo featuring the death of the central character gets a thumbs up from me.

    The character categories was the closest one of the whole thing for me, with TGO just edging the combined scores.

    Good luck, guys!
    Last edited by SpecificSecretary; 08-26-2022 at 02:56 AM.


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