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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by 1000Deaths View Post
    Aaron Kendrick, the details of the scenery and extra thoughts about everything kind of lost my interest. It shows good character work to the point of I definitely see what you're going for, and I'd also say the completely blank, normal, non bolded or italicized parts could use some sort of formatting as well.

    Maybe it's just being a stickler, but he said he'd "pay for the whole bill" ,and leave, but neither of them ordered anything, lol.

    I appreciate your criticism, but I just have to say your preference of the formatting doesn't really match mine. I don't like scrolling through and seeing fifteen different colors in dialogue. To me, part of the reading experience is making your own observations and not cheating and telling everyone exactly what's going on. That's just me, anyway. But with that being said, I will try from now on to write in a way that suits everyone else's preferences. If anyone else has any advice or criticisms, please feel free to give it to me.

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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Oh I don't mean several different colors, and I hope I definitely didn't seem harsh at all, just usual review of promos and what not.

    Rather, I meant how some parts just were plain, with no color at all or anything.

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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Didn't know what a "neophyte" was and I had to look it up lol. Can't say "efedding never taught me something" now.

    Hope y'all enjoy the new Izzy :D
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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by Codename Bags View Post
    I appreciate your criticism, but I just have to say your preference of the formatting doesn't really match mine. I don't like scrolling through and seeing fifteen different colors in dialogue. To me, part of the reading experience is making your own observations and not cheating and telling everyone exactly what's going on. That's just me, anyway. But with that being said, I will try from now on to write in a way that suits everyone else's preferences. If anyone else has any advice or criticisms, please feel free to give it to me.
    I don't think you're going to please people by having a rainbow in your promos. Colour isn't important imo, the fact that the promo is clear and easy to read is what is important. Reading your most recent promo the formatting is quite bland. I'd experiment with trying different things like bolding non-dialogue sections so that it doesn't just look like a block of text. Formatting is the most subjective section that FWA score on.

    Shake, Kaizen and Sayer all format differently for the promos. They have three different opinions of what makes a promo look good, hence they're going to score differently.

    Don't get too bogged down in the aesthetics tho.

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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by ONAMStar View Post
    Didn't know what a "neophyte" was and I had to look it up lol. Can't say "efedding never taught me something" now.

    Hope y'all enjoy the new Izzy :D
    ... I thought the new Izzy was gonna go around singing loudly "It's Izzzzzzyyyyy DAAAAAAYYYYYY!!!!!"....

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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Will be home in a few hours so can prob get a promo in since I see the deadline is tonight by midnight.

    Got zero sight seeing done, too cold and Friday it was snowing when I got here in chicago.... plus I was just too busy with paper work.

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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Ok, got one in. wrote it pretty much all on my phone in the lobby waiting for my flight. Had to reformat it some in Word. Sorry for any typos or anything spelled wrong. Or any grammar issues. I just wanted to try to get something in before the deadline. I'm tired, if I can, I will try to critique others promos

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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    My formatting is off in a few places. I think I forgot to paste it as plain text.... oh well, that's what I get for rushing to get it posted

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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Is the deadline not 8am UK time?

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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by TheProdigy View Post
    Is the deadline not 8am UK time?
    Yeah it is, I think it was just a typo


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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Ok, had a chance to read thru the promos

    Zako- good promo but pretty much the same as your others- other than the fact that you are talking about four opponents instead of one.

    Aarons Kendrick- liked the promo a lot, well written and good look into your character. Didn't talk about your opponent all that much, but still a really good well written promo .

    Buck- as always, with the promos with the SCV, really good promo.

    Ty- well done. Yes it was not a promo where his character cut a promo against his opponent - it was pretty much a history lesson about the character. But like with Tommy Thunders stuff, I have read Sully writings for a long time- Tommys longer as Sully left the EWN forum years ago, they are both great writers (and Efed runners).

    Tommy Thunder- See above. I like the fact that his character and Sullivan have history and that plays into this fued. If it goes on longer, maybe even less to no talking about that history though.

    Izzy- liked that she went for a way different look then changed her mind a bit. The promo itself was pretty good too. You talked about the match, your opponents, you built your character more.

    Starr- liked the documentary set up- gave a bit more insight to the character. Worked well with the part talking about the match.

    Randall - prob my fav promo out of all of them.

    I am still tired, I think that's all the promos I will comment on.

    Mine has formatting issues, I know.

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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by TheProdigy View Post
    Is the deadline not 8am UK time?
    Quote Originally Posted by CocksyMitch View Post
    Yeah it is, I think it was just a typo
    Yes, the deadline is 8am UK time, yes it original posted UK time was a typo, my bad, its been fixed.

    i blame the queen.

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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Sayer not gonna lie that's probably the best promo I've seen from you. You've always been good but you keep getting better.


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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Mitch, thanks man, that means a lot.

    I'm off tomorrow so I'll be writing the Clockwork Orange match. After that I'll be grading and since there are 5 promos I don't have to grade, I'll take that time to do some reviews. Good showing for Mile High. Great job guys.

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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by KAIZEN View Post
    Yes, the deadline is 8am UK time, yes it original posted UK time was a typo, my bad, its been fixed.

    i blame the queen.
    Good reason.


    I suspect it was due to the clocks changing and all that shit.


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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by Just Plain Sayer View Post
    Mitch, thanks man, that means a lot.

    I'm off tomorrow so I'll be writing the Clockwork Orange match. After that I'll be grading and since there are 5 promos I don't have to grade, I'll take that time to do some reviews. Good showing for Mile High. Great job guys.
    So should we submit spots to you(if we have any)?

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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Yup

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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Hm, not one extension was needed.

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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by 1000Deaths View Post
    Hm, not one extension was needed.
    Extensions weren't allowed this time.

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    Re: Mile High 2017 Promo Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by 1000Deaths View Post
    Hm, not one extension was needed.
    I dint think I would get on in tbh.
    And I have to say, writing a large promo on a phone really sucks. Was not that bad when we would do bqck and forth promos at EWN, but this way, it takes a lot longer on a phone.

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