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    Fight Night August 11th Promo Discussion Thread

    Discuss Promos here using constructive criticism.

    I will be choosing six promos at random to review this week. The other mods may or may not do the same.
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    Re: Fight Night August 11th Promo Discussion Thread

    The Zako Wrath origin story is here!

    Lol, it literally took three and a half hours to write, my phone didn't help much, it made coloring and formatting horrible, but it was all worth it to have it done and finished finally.

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    Re: Fight Night August 11th Promo Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by 1000Deaths View Post
    The Zako Wrath origin story is here!

    Lol, it literally took three and a half hours to write, my phone didn't help much, it made coloring and formatting horrible, but it was all worth it to have it done and finished finally.
    Personally, I think you should have put in the extra effort and worried about the coloring and formatting a lot more. That and I thought Amy Duke was supposed to be ditzy.

    But it was nice finally getting some background on the guy

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    Quote Originally Posted by hanz gruber View Post
    Personally, I think you should have put in the extra effort and worried about the coloring and formatting a lot more. That and I thought Amy Duke was supposed to be ditzy.

    But it was nice finally getting some background on the guy
    I did ! Lol that was literally the only trouble, and I thought it seemed all formated and colored mostly...a bit or two I just wouldn't have been able to fix without redoing and I couldn't quite figure it out at the time lol...yeah I noticed we both wrote her drastically differently...yours was Ok Maria...mine was more Renee Young lol.

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    The Deception promo- I have to give it a thorough reading thru. I just skimmed it as I took a break from doing something work related. But I want to say, we did not work on it together. He asked for permission for using one of my former characters on another forum- I told him yes, go ahead. Being that we came from the same forum we are both a little familar with each other's work. That said, I can't wait to properly give it a 4ead thru.

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    Re: Fight Night August 11th Promo Discussion Thread

    Yeah, looking at it again there was a few errors with formatting but like I said my phone made coloring and bolding horrible and when I finally finished I was just thrilled to post it.

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    Re: Fight Night August 11th Promo Discussion Thread

    My primary issue with the promo was even though it did a fantastic job of telling his backstory...there was no mention made of his upcoming match, even if it is just a squash match. Not a huge deal but I wish there would have been something there.

    Deception's promo was big improvement on last week, but from a grammatical standpoint, you really need to spell and punctuation check your promos. I think KAI is going to go more in depth with yours but just a heads up as it's a quick way to score some easy points.

    I'll be doing the same as Shake later on this week, choosing six at random to review more in depth.

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    Re: Fight Night August 11th Promo Discussion Thread

    I meant to ask actually...who the hell are Prim's Angels?

    Lol and who the hell is Prim?

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    Re: Fight Night August 11th Promo Discussion Thread

    Just a random team of jobbers.

    And Prem is a douchebag.

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    Re: Fight Night August 11th Promo Discussion Thread

    Prem's a saddact who got many chances in the FWA but kept noshowing. He got banned for life but made multiple new accounts here and signed up new characters. He's dumb because he gives himself away every single time and doesn't realise I can view his IP as well as understand if an account is using proxies.

    In other words: Prem has multiple accounts, signs up, gets caught, everytime. If he's here, we know.
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    He told me one time I was ripping off Zoey. Good times.
    The most amazing thing about this recent conversation is that I've learned AON is even more of a waste of space than I thought he was previously

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    First time asking for an extension. Work currently has me swamped.

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    Re: Fight Night August 11th Promo Discussion Thread

    sure but your opponent gets one too
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    Re: Fight Night August 11th Promo Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by Powerful Sayer View Post
    My primary issue with the promo was even though it did a fantastic job of telling his backstory...there was no mention made of his upcoming match, even if it is just a squash match. Not a huge deal but I wish there would have been something there.

    Deception's promo was big improvement on last week, but from a grammatical standpoint, you really need to spell and punctuation check your promos. I think KAI is going to go more in depth with yours but just a heads up as it's a quick way to score some easy points.

    I'll be doing the same as Shake later on this week, choosing six at random to review more in depth.
    Thanks much btw, I honestly and humbly saw it as quite the big tale when I thought it up, so I'm glad to hear it. Lol yeah that would have capped it all off perfectly.

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    Re: Fight Night August 11th Promo Discussion Thread

    Just curious why you wrote it on your phone tho? sounds like too much effort
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    Re: Fight Night August 11th Promo Discussion Thread

    Ok, got to read the Deception promo thouroughly- Graves you did a great job with it. No fault in what you came up with- but there are still some grammar issues here and there. And it seems you may have formatted one part as Deception speaking when it looked like an action- which would be in italics.
    That said, great job adressing your opponent, me,/hanz via one of Hanzs friends and taking advantage of my promo from last week in your promo.

    Now off to see Metallica- well in a little while.

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    Re: Fight Night August 11th Promo Discussion Thread

    Katie > Amy but none hold a candle to Renee Young

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    Re: Fight Night August 11th Promo Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by RyuShake Taguchi View Post
    Just curious why you wrote it on your phone tho? sounds like too much effort
    I have no computer lol!

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    Re: Fight Night August 11th Promo Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by hanz gruber View Post
    Ok, got to read the Deception promo thouroughly- Graves you did a great job with it. No fault in what you came up with- but there are still some grammar issues here and there. And it seems you may have formatted one part as Deception speaking when it looked like an action- which would be in italics.
    That said, great job adressing your opponent, me,/hanz via one of Hanzs friends and taking advantage of my promo from last week in your promo.

    Now off to see Metallica- well in a little while.

    I like all of this except the Metallica never cared for them tbh

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    Re: Fight Night August 11th Promo Discussion Thread

    Quote Originally Posted by OMBGraves View Post
    Katie > Amy but none hold a candle to Renee Young
    What's there even to compare about them? Lol, besides if anything, there's waaayyy too much Katie Goldstein in stuff, and for that reason I almost used her instead! Lol

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