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Re: The New Legacy of ECW

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Originally Posted by Jay M. Punkster View Post


The New Legacy : Episode 1.

The show begins with the camera flying through the sold out crowd. In the ring is the GM Armando Estrada he takes the mic and begins to talk.

‘’ Everybody listen to me !!! Tonight we say welcome to a lot of new talent but more important we say welcome to the new ECW Champion and the new CM. Punk !!

CM Punks music goes off as he walks out to a mix reaction wearing a suit looking like a champion. CM Punk refuses to shake the people hands while he walks to the ring and when he gets in he shakes Armando’s hand before grabbing a mic and begging to talk.

‘’ Thanks for the intro Estrada I do deserve it, ‘’

Crowd boo

‘’ Shut your mouths,!!!!!!..

Crowd react.
‘’ so I guess you guys wanna no why ive changed all a sudden ? well its simple being mister nice guy was getting me nowhere, I was being kicked around but it was okay because I had the fans on my side. Well guess what ? id rather have the championship !!’’

Crowd boo

‘’ You see im a superb athlete, im straight edge people !! and that means im better than you..

Just then Jeff Hardys music goes off !! the crowd pop like crazy as the chant he’s name. He comes out with he’s money in the bank briefcase and makes he’s way to the ring shaking he’s fans hands and he gets in the ring. He grabs a mic.

‘’ First off I just want to say thank you to all you fans for your support and secondly you say you’re a superb athlete , you say your Straight Edge but more importantly you say your better than them ?? Well the first two maybe right but the last , Well no way !! your not better than them, if it wasn’t for them you wouldn’t be champion in the first place.
CM Punk interrupts.

‘’ Well if its not the rainbow haired warrior Mr. Money in the bank himself Jeff Hardy !! This is my ring Jeff and you have to ask before you can get in it. And yes I am a great Athlete and yes I am Straight edge something you wouldn’t no anything about, we all no about you and your past ..

Crowd react

‘’ Jeff you don’t have what it takes to be someone like me ! straight edge isn’t just a choice it’s a living and that is why it means im better than you..

CM Punk and Jeff put there face’s together. Armando grabs the mic.

‘’ Not now , not now !!! ‘’

The don’t listen and begin to strike at each other. Jeff Hardy knocks CM Punk down with a clothesline. Just then Paul Burchill runs down the ramp and slides into the ring, He chop blocks Hardy and then him and Punk begin to kick at Hardy. Burchill is then joined by hes sister who cheers both men on as the kick at Hardy. Just then Jamie Nobles music goes off as he runs down the ramp. This cause Punk and both Burchills along with Estrada to exit the ring. The make there way up the ramp while Noble checks on Hardy.

Armando gets on the mic

‘’ ok , ok , things have changed. Tonight its going to be you two in the ring teaming up taking on The Ripper Paul Burchill and the ECW Champion CM Punk!!! so get ready for a welcome to the extreme !!!

Nice segment to open altho it does seem a little similar to Sora's opening. A shame your first action is a bait & switch with the match change, but i'll see how it turns out before giving it a thumbs down.

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Goes to a commercial Break.
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Show comes back on and where at ringside .

Match No.1

Kofi Kingston vs. Lance Cade

Lance Cade makes he’s way to the ring with a new look. He’s wearing a robe and a Cowboy Hat as he gets in the ring. Cade grabs a mic.

‘’ Tonight is the debut of the new Lance Cade , Tonight is the Debut of The Dark Horse. I’m 6ft 5 , 265, And I’m here in ECW to hurt anyone that gets in my way .

Kofi Kingston’s music goes off as he comes out smiling. He makes he way to the ring shaking the fans hands. He climbs in as the ref calls for the bell. Both men tie. Cade uses he’s strength to push Kofi off. Cade smiles. Kofi smiles also. The tie up again but this time Kofi counters and goes to the back. He goes for a head lock on Cade but Cade lifts him up and pushes him into the corner. Cade runs for a clothesline but Kofi moves out of the way as Cade goes crashing into the corner. Kofi starts to strike at Cade and then hits a spinning leg sweep. He goes for a quick cover 1,2, kick out.

Fast forward in the match.

Both men are striking, Cade hits a vicious clothesline followed by a huge leg drop on Kofi , He then lifts him up and whips him into the ropes. Kofi hits a massive counter with he’s modified hip toss, He hits a quick second and then he’s boo boo dancing leg drop.
The crowd jump

He lifts Cade up and goes for he’s Buzz saw kick, Cade ducks the kick and whips Kofi into the corner. Cade follows and starts to punch him he then pushes him out of the corner and jumps up on the second rope. He goes for a bulldog but Kofi hits a dropkick. Kofi try’s for a cover but the ref says Cade is under the rope. Kofi pulls Cade into the centre and covers. 1,2, kick out the ropes saved Cade there.

Fast Forward in the Match.

Cade has Kofi in a headlock. Kofi elbows out of it with the crowd pumping him up. He whips Cade into the ropes, He goes for a cross body, Cade ducks and the ref gets taking out. Kofi checks on the ref and that moment of distraction allows Cade to get to he’s feet and kick Kofi downstairs and then hits a viscous clothesline. Cade wakes the ref up as he covers. 1,2, kick out by Kofi Kingston

Crowd pop

Cade cant believe it. He gets really angry as he starts to pound on Kofi, the ref counts to five for a break in the punches but Cade refuses and the ref calls for the bell. Cade is shocked when Kofi is named the winner. He pushes the ref out of the ring and lifts Kofi up he pulls him into another vicious clothesline . Kofi is really hurt while Cade climbs top rope, He points towards Kofi , He then jumps off hitting a massive elbow drop on the lifeless body of Kofi Kingston. Cade gets to he’s feet and puts he’s cowboy hat on as he smiles leaving the ring.

Refs run in to check on Kofi as we go ringside to Tazz and Joey Styles.

Very good match to open your brand with. The finish was a little weak as Dqed for punching in ECW doesnt seem right. Good way to establish Cade as the heel tho.

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Camera goes backstage and CM Punk is in the GM’s room with both Burchills.

The GM begins to talk.

‘’ Now I no you don’t want Jeff Hardy going after your title with ehs money in the bank but Punk its good for ECW.

Punk responds

‘’ I don’t care what’s good for ECW I only care what’s good for me and that CM Punk to you sir.

Punk looks at both Burchills

‘’ I wanna no do you have what it takes to take out Hardy and Noble ?? ‘’

Katie Lea responds

‘’ CM Punk the don’t call my brother The Ripper for nothing he’s the most brutal , vicious and beautiful man in the world

She rubs Burchills chest

and tonight he shows you , Mr. Estrada here and the world just why. ‘’

I'm not sure about the ripper gimmick & the incest gimmick at the same time. I like the change in Punk's attitude tho.

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Goes to a commercial Break.
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Match No. 2.

Where at ringside with two local wrestlers already in the ring. Armando comes out to the ramp.

‘’ Smackdown and ECW have come u with something new !! we are going to start making random tag teams that consist of one superstar form Smackdown and one from ECW. And the first team will be made now totally random. The camera goes to the big screen and it shows images of all the ECW roster. It starts going through all of them when it stops on Elijah Burke. He’s music goes off as hes comes out on stage. He waits ,

‘’ and hes partner ‘’

The camera goes back to the big screen this time it shows all the Smackdown roster. It goes through the roster and stops on The Worlds Strongest Man Mark Henry. Hes music goes off as he walks out . Him and Elijah look at each other before the walk down the ramp.

Armando talks.

‘’ Enjoy your new team !! ‘’

He walks to the back.

Both men make there way to the ring as the two inside look nervous, Before the ref can call for the bell. Mark Henry and Burke go on the attack. Burke hits a dropkick on one of the guys knocking him out of the ring. Henry hits the other with a stiff clothesline. Burke lifts up that man and hits a pair of punches to hes head. Burke then whips him into the corner and Henry runs and splashes him in the corner. Burke then runs and hits the Elijah Express driving both knees into the chest of the hurt wrestler. The other wrestler climbs into the ring and trys to smack Henry, it has no affect. Henry turns around and lifts him up and puts him right back down with The Worlds Strongest Slam. Burke tells Henry to lift him up in the bear hug. Henry accepts and does it. He squeezes tight as the wrestler screams in pain. Burke starts to slap the jobber while hes in the hold as the ref checks on him. The wrestler passes out and Elijah Burke and Mark Henry are named winners. The raise there hands in the air showing why there going to be the next WWE tag team champs.

For a random team they shouldent have that much cemistry. After a few matches fair enough, but they seemed to know what the other was going to do in this match. Poor guy getting a bearhug from Mark Henry.

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Commercial Break.
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We come back and where in the back with Tommy Dreamer and Colin Delany.

Dreamer : ‘’ Tonight you get the chance to prove the world and the roster that you belong here in ECW. You go out there and when I tell ya to do something you do it and that will get ya a win.

Colin is about to respond but Dreamer interrupts him.

Dreamer : ‘’No excuses Delany now go your match is next.. ‘’

Delany leaves as Dreamer looks on.
Nice short promo. Does what is needed.

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Where in Jeff Hardy locker room. He’s with Noble as there talking. Threes a knock at the door and Katie Lea Burchill walks in. She walks over to Hardy.
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‘’ Jeffrey on behalf of my beautiful brother Paul I would just like to apologies. He didn’t want to attack you but he picked hes moment to debut, you cant blame him for that. I hope your okay.

She starts to rub he’s back.

Jeff looks at here ‘’ Your brother stuck he’s noise where it didn’t belong so tonight that’s going to get him a cruel twist of faith and a swanton !! Jeff shrugs her off .

Noble walks towards her.

‘’ You can rub me if ya want …

Jeff and Noble laugh as she storms out of there.

The camera goes to ringside.
I dont think this promo was needed. It didnt really do anything to build the match.

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Match No.3
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‘’ The following match is scheduled for one fall and is a ECW Extreme Rules Match. Making hes way to the ring first from!!! LA he is The Guru of Greatness John Morrison

Morrison comes out to a bad crowd reaction as he brings a shopping cart full of weapons to the ring. He starts to throw the weapons in the ring as The announcer begins to talk .

‘’ And hes opponent being couponed to the ring by Tommy Dreamer he is Colin Delany !!! Delany comes out holding a stop sign. Dreamer pushing him down the ramp. Delany climbs on the apron and turns to Dreamer showing he’s hesitation , Morrison runs and dropkicks Delany flying him off the apron and onto the rail. Morrison follows He whips Delany into the steps. Dreamer is getting annoyed. John lifts Colin up and whips him into the ring. Morrison follows as he picks up the stop sign. He waits fro Delany to get to he’s feet and then runs and swings it, Colin ducks and goes for a quick roll up. 1.2. kick out. Delany looks confused as Dreamer screams at him to get on the attack. Delany waits and then agrees. He picks up a kendo stick , he waits and waits for Morrison to get up , He swings and Morrison garbs it, John takes it and smacks Delany over the head with it. Delany falls to he’s the mat. And Morrison starts to swing at him , smashing him in the back. Delany screams in pain. John goes for a cover 1,2, kick out.

Fast forward in Match

Morrison and Delany are trading punches , John swings one and Delany ducks , Delany hits a ddt he covers 1,2, kick out. Delany garbs a trash can lid and when John gets up he throws it at Morrison smashing him in the face. Morrison is lifted up but he hits a enziguri dropping Delany down.

Crowd jump.

Dreamer tells Delany to set up the table. Delany aggress and sets it up in the corner. He lifts Morrison up and whips him into the corner, Morrison counters and sends Delany into it. Delany stops just in time grabbing the table to stop him from going into it. Morrison runs but Delany hits a hip toss driving Morrison throw the table. The crowd go crazy. Delany falls to he’s feet the previous attacks taking it out on him. Dreamer screams for him ti pin him. Delany is to hurt , he slowly makes the cover 1,,,,2,,,,, kick out.. Dreamer cant believe Delany ruined he’s chance. Both men get to there feet and start to trade blows , Delany tries to swing one but Morrison counters and gets him in a sleeper. Delany is fading as Dreamer calls for him to get out. Delany falls to he’s knees but the crowd begin to chant he’s name. This fires him up and he stands up he starts to elbow Morrison but Morrison doesn’t let go , Delany runs into the corner while Morrison has the Sleeper locked in and Delany runs up the corner pushing back making Morrison fall onto he’s back and Delany on top of him covering him while the sleeper is still locked in. The ref covers , 1……………………………..2…………⠀¦â€¦â€¦â€¦â€¦â€¦â€¦â€¦â€¦â€¦â€¦ just then Tommy Dreamer throws in a towel and the ref see’s The ref rings the bell and John Morrison
is named winner.

The crowd boo like crazy, Morrison gets up and celebrates holding hes ribs as eh leaves the ring he now he got off lucky. Delany cant believe what’s going on as Dreamer checks on him. Delany says that he had it but Dreamer says that he was only looking out for him. Was he ??
I kinda suspected Dreamer would do something from the way he was acting during the match. I think the match went a little too long considering on of them is basically a jobber & the other is a former champion.

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Commercial Break.
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We come back and a video package begins to play, it’s Colt Cabana sitting at a news table welcome to the first edition of Good Times Great Memories !! im you ost Colt ‘ Boom Boom ‘ Cabana and ill be debuting in a few weeks time but to todays news. CM Punk the ECW has turned heel. It shows a baby crying . I no CM Punk a long time and all I can say is Im Straight Edge and im better than you !!! Next !! The next story is that ECW has found itself a new tag team, Elijha Burke and Mark Henry all I can say is Gross !! imagine them having….. Next !!! the final story today is about Paul Burchill and hes sis Katie Lee now ive seen some sick things come out of England shows a clip of Tony Blair but these brother and sister take the cake. Come on this cant be allowed on tv can it ??

A clip of Mr. McMahon dancing is played. Colt looks scared when the camera comes back on .

‘’ Ok so TV has changed . haha well that dose it for today’s edition of Good Time and Great Memories im your host Colt Cabana and ill see ya next time. The music begins to play like on the news and Cabana starts talking to no one .
I enjoyed that but i do think Cabana got a bit too much. If he was returning then it would be right, but he has never wrestled on WWE before so a little odd. Hopefully you have big plans for him tho.


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Main Event
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‘’ The following match is scheduled for one fall and is or main event of the evening, First from Hanover , West Virginia he is The Redneck Messiah Jamie Nobel !!! ‘’

Jamie comes out from behind the curtain and is hit with cheers, he runs down the ramp shaking the fans hands while he flys past , he slides into the ring and awaits hes partner.

‘’ And hes partner from Cameron, North Carolina he is the holder of The Money in the Bank he is Jeff Hardy !!!

Jeff comes skipping out , he’s pyro goes off as he makes hes way to the ring . He slides into the ring and him and Nobel await there opponents.

‘’ And the opponents , first being braught to the ring by his sister Katie lea Burchill he is London, England , he is The Ripper Paul Burchill !!

Paul and Katie come out with there arms around each other. The brother and sister make there way to the ring, but the stop at the end of the ramp.

‘’ And ehs partner from Chicago , Illinois he is The ECW World Champion , he is CM Punk !!! ‘’

Punk comes out to new music as he walks down the ramp holding hes championship. He stops at Burchill and the talk. Just then Jeff and Noble run and dive over the ropes taking out both men.

The crowd pop as Katie Lee runs out of the way.
Should Punk not have had the new music for his first appearance of the nite rather than his last? Doesnt make sense for it to change halfway thru the show.

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All four men start to attack each other, Punches, kicks and everything else is being used to try and take each other down. Noble gets Irish whipped into the steps by Punk. Burchill gets whipped into the crowd rail by Hardy also. Jeff runs along the rail and goes to hit Punk but Punk moves out of the way and Jeff crashes on the floor. Punk starts to kick at Hardy. Punk then whips Hardy into the ring and he follows. Punk starts to kick at Hardy all over and then hits a quick legdrop. He covers 1,2, kick out. Both Burchill and Noble get to there corners. Punk whips Hardy into Burchills corner , Jeff goes up and over and Punk crashes into the corner. Punk tags in Burchill.
Burchill and Hardy circle before the tie up, Burchill whips Hardy into the ropes, He leapfrogs Hardy and then Hardy slides under and to behind The Ripper. Hardy locks in a headlock but Burchill counters with a quick back suplex. Burchill starts to punch at Hardy and then hits a scoop slam. He tags in Punk again and both hit a double gut buster. Noble tries to run in but the ref brings him back out. This moment of distraction allows Burchill to come back in with out tagging by clapping to make the sound. Burchill locks in a ground headlock on Hardy and Hardy has nowhere to go. Burchill holds out he’s hand and Punk tags in. Punk comes in and drops a knee to Hardy and then lifts him up, Hardy hits a kick to the head of Punk, Hardy tries to tag Nobel but Punk pulls him back in and hits a double arm backbreaker, he covers 1,2, kick out. Punk pulls Hardy back into the corner and he tags Burchill again. Burchill comes in and while Punk holds Hardy he drives he’s boot into the chest of Hardy. Burchill lifts him up and pretends to whip him into Nobles corner only to pull him back and into he’s corner, Only Hardy runs up the corner and hits The Whisper in the Wind , Burchill is down. Hardy slowly goes towards Noble but Punk runs in and grabs he’s leg, Hardy counters and hits he’s spin kick, He reaches, reaches, and reaches more towards Noble just when he gets near enough Nobles slaps him right in the face,
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The crowd go crazy with Boo’s

Hardy falls back into Burchill who hits a clothesline. Burchill lifts Hardy up but just then Hardy hits the Twist of Faith on him , knocking him down . Hardy sees Punk and runs towards him but Noble stops and pulls him back. Noble goes for The Gibson Driver but Hardy hits a back body drop. Katie Lee gets on the apron , Hardy gets distracted and for that moment Punk runs and pushes him into the corner. Punk runs and hits he’s knee/bulldog combo, Punk, Burchill and Noble all start to kick at Hardy. The lift him up and Punk pulls him into the GTS . He connects it and Hardy goes to sleep. Hardy covers , The ref regretfully makes the pin , 1,,,2,,,,3,,,,

‘’ The winner of the match Paul Burchill and The ECW Champion CM Punk !!! . ‘’


The all stand over him as Katie Lee brings in Punk championship, she hands it to him and Noble garbs Hardys Money in the bank briefcase. He screams this should have been mine before he holds it in the air. All four people stand with there arms in the air with Punk holding he’s belt, Noble holding the case and Burchill holding he’s sisters hand. The all smile as the camera looks at Hardy in pain and fades to dark.
Noble did very little in the match which isnt a good thing if you want him to feud with Hardy over the MITB Case. Hardy didnt get enough near tags either. Otherwise tho, it was a good match & the Noble heel turn was a nice suprise but you may be lacking in Main Event Faces now.

My Ratings:

Match Making: 7/10. The random tag team let it down.

Match Writing: 7/10. Not a fan of the fast forward tactic you used.

Promos: 6/10. Colt Cabana was your saving grace. Other than Dreamer that was the only one that did was it was ment to & did it well. The opening segment i didnt count as a promo.

Spelling/Grammer: 4/10. Quite a few mistakes. Online spell check | Orangoo Empire I'd advise you use that before posting your shows.

Flow: 6/10. I'm not a fan of suddendly going to the commentators as a way of changing segments. If you want to use that, they should be a lot more involved.

Overall: 60%. Not a bad start & i can see this improving. The spelling alone will improve it a lot. I'd also advise you break it up better. Use Bold or color more than you did.